1. After finishing my rough draft, I did not have too many concerns over my paper. Overall, I was very satisfied with my work. However, I did notice that I had a few too many run on sentences that I could split up to make it easier for the reader to understand.
2. My peers were very helpful and gave great comments on my paper. One of the positive comments they all said was how they liked my quote integrations. They all believed that I did a good job in introducing my quotations and also did well in explaining their relevance to my paper. On page four of my paper, Brandon commented, “Great intro into the quote, and explaining it to the reader to understand”. Their comments were very helpful and gave me confidence in my writing.
3. I believe I worked best with Gee when describing just what primary Discourses and secondary Discourses are. I explained both concepts in a way that would make sense to a reader who has no prior knowledge to what these are. My peer Sam commented,”I think that this sentence is well worked and helps the readers understand discourses more and secondary Discourses”.
4. I believe that I worked best with Cuddy on page five, when I mention the two personal stories she shared in her speech. I used her stories and connected them to the work of Gee and his explanations of what it takes for a person to enter a Discourse. My peer Sam made another great comment on this page. She said, “I like that you used this story she told because I think it is a very powerful story. It shows the difference when a person is powerless compared to when a person is powerful”.
5. My peers gave me lots of feedback that will be helpful in touching up my rough draft. One main comment most of them had was based on my run on sentences. In these run on sentences, I tried to pile as much information as possible. I see now that it would be more effective to split these sentences up, to make my paper more fluid and easier to read. Another great comment I got was from Kiara in person during our small group discussions in class. She mentioned to me that it would give the reader more clarity and information if I describe the reasoning for the “D” in Discourse always being capitalized. I found this to be very helpful as it was something that had never previously crossed my mind. I believe that adding this information will really enhance my paper.
6. I will help the reader get my perspective by discussing my points in as clear a way as possible, and making my connections easy for the reader to understand.
